3.4.15

Book Blurb Breakdown: The Five Stages of Andrew Brawley by Shaun David Hutchinson

book blurb breakdown

Book Blurb Breakdown is a Sarcasm & Lemons feature where your anal English degree-holding author (gently) rips apart jacket blurbs to pin down what makes her want to pick up the book instantly--and what makes her want to throw it at the wall.  See the original post for more detail.  


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today's blurb



Status:  Unread


the blurb: as is 
from Goodreads

Andrew Brawley was supposed to die that night. His parents did, and so did his sister, but he survived.

Now he lives in the hospital. He serves food in the cafeteria, he hangs out with the nurses, and he sleeps in a forgotten supply closet. Drew blends in to near invisibility, hiding from his past, his guilt, and those who are trying to find him.

Then one night Rusty is wheeled into the ER, burned on half his body by hateful classmates. His agony calls out to Drew like a beacon, pulling them both together through all their pain and grief. In Rusty, Drew sees hope, happiness, and a future for both of them. A future outside the hospital, and away from their pasts.

But Drew knows that life is never that simple. Death roams the hospital, searching for Drew, and now Rusty. Drew lost his family, but he refuses to lose Rusty, too, so he’s determined to make things right. He’s determined to bargain, and to settle his debts once and for all.

But Death is not easily placated, and Drew’s life will have to get worse before there is any chance for things to get better.

A partly graphic novel.


the blurb:  shredded 

Andrew Brawley was supposed to die that night. (Okay, that opens with a bang.) His parents did, and so did his sister, but he survived.  (Um, obviously he survived.  Didn't really need that bit.)  

Now he lives in the hospital. (Hm. How does that work? Do they let him? How has he not been taken in by Child Protective Services?)  He serves food in the cafeteria, he hangs out with the nurses, and he sleeps in a forgotten supply closet.  (Disbelief aside, this is pretty interesting.)  Drew blends in to near invisibility, hiding from his past, his guilt, and those who are trying to find him.  (Hm, guilt.  People trying to find him.  You've intrigued me.  Clearly something happened that night and it wasn't your average accident.)  

Then one night Rusty is wheeled into the ER, burned on half his body by hateful classmates. His agony calls out to Drew like a beacon, pulling them both together through all their pain and grief.  (The phrase "all their pain and grief" annoys me, as well as the "like a beacon", but I like the sentiment.  Friendship is great!  And maybe more?  Unclear.)  In Rusty, Drew sees hope, happiness, and a future for both of them. A future outside the hospital, and away from their pasts.  (This sounds hopeful and adorable.)

But Drew knows that life is never that simple.  (This is a throwaway sentence.  Gr.)  Death roams the hospital, searching for Drew, and now Rusty.  (Okay, what?  Death?  Um, awesome!  This sentence is awkward though.  The "and now Rusty" feels tacked on, when it should really be set off and given more emphasis.) Drew lost his family, but he refuses to lose Rusty, too, so he’s determined to make things right.  (Okay, I've nailed my irritation.  There are too many sentences with an excessive amount of phrases set off by commas.) He’s determined to bargain, and to settle his debts once and for all.  (Commas aside, this paragraph just turned this from a cute friendship story into something unique and awesome.)

But Death is not easily placated,  (Oooh, tell me more!) and Drew’s life will have to get worse before there is any chance for things to get better.  (Except that.  Um, duh it will have to get worse.  This is so vague!  What actually happens?  Is there some kind of crazy cat-and-mouse game?  Is there a fight?  Do they play Battleship?)  

A partly graphic novel.  (Okay, hold the phone.  Absolutely must read this.  Getting Scott Pilgrim vibes for some reason.) 


the verdict 
3/5 stars

would i read it?:  yes

Honestly, this blurb isn't terribly well crafted.  Most of the sentences are rambling, with too many phrases separated by too many commas.  There's a lack of specificity and punch in the language, giving the whole thing the air of a neophyte fanfiction.  That said, content-wise, it gives enough detail to set up a fascinating story.  Boy running from Death?  You've hooked me.  Partially graphic novel?  Okay, that's something I've never seen before.  Even though the blurb's writing gives me some pause, I'm interested enough in the premise to risk it.  Hopefully, I can blame the comma craze on the marketing team and not the author.  I only wish that the blurb were more specific about what actually goes on in the book.  What happens with Death?  What's the meat of the plot?  What are these Five Stages?  Is this a play on the Five Stages of Grief?  I suppose I'm curious enough to read, so maybe that's what they were going for.  

(And, not gonna lie, the guy on the front reminds me of Seth Cohen and so there are definitely some positive feels amplifying my opinion...) 





your thoughts

Does this blurb grab you?  
Do you agree with my thoughts?  If not, how so?  
Do you have any recommendations for blurbs I should shred?  








2 comments:

  1. OHHHH I'M SO GOING TO PARTICIPATE IN THIS! It's exactly what the english major/writer in me didn't know that I needed!

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    1. YAY A BLURB FRIEND! This is probably my favorite thing to do every week. Can't wait to see your thoughts!

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