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Book Blurb Breakdown: Rebel Sands by Alwyn Hamilton

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Book Blurb Breakdown is a Sarcasm & Lemons feature where your anal English degree-holding author (gently) rips apart jacket blurbs to pin down what makes her want to pick up the book instantly--and what makes her want to throw it at the wall.  See the original post for more detail.  

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today's blurb




Status:  Unread


the blurb: as is 

from Goodreads


She’s more gunpowder than girl—and the fate of the desert lies in her hands.

Mortals rule the desert nation of Miraji, but mystical beasts still roam the wild and barren wastes, and rumor has it that somewhere, djinni still practice their magic. But there's nothing mystical or magical about Dustwalk, the dead-end town that Amani can't wait to escape from. 

Destined to wind up "wed or dead," Amani’s counting on her sharpshooting skills to get her out of Dustwalk. When she meets Jin, a mysterious and devastatingly handsome foreigner, in a shooting contest, she figures he’s the perfect escape route. But in all her years spent dreaming of leaving home, she never imagined she'd gallop away on a mythical horse, fleeing the murderous Sultan's army, with a fugitive who's wanted for treason. And she'd never have predicted she'd fall in love with him...or that he'd help her unlock the powerful truth of who she really is. 


the blurb:  shredded 



She’s more gunpowder than girl (I really like this line. It's sassy and moreover, short.)—and the fate of the desert lies in her hands. (The second half is okay. Not sure if I like the em dash.  The whole thing is a great, pithy opener, though.)

Mortals rule the desert nation of Miraji, (Like "mirage?" *eye twitches* *yes, is a snob about names) but mystical beasts still roam the wild and barren wastes, (Full stop, please!) and (Remove this traitorous 'and'!  Edit: I might have changed my mind about the 'and.') rumor has it that somewhere, djinni still practice their magic. (Djinni! Yeah, it's a trend, but I'm always open for more. Plus, I like the sort of mythical set-up we have here in the desert.) But there's nothing mystical or magical about Dustwalk, (Why is this name in English?!) the dead-end town that Amani can't wait to escape from. (Is Amani "she?" This is nitpicky, but her name should be introduced in the first paragraph to promote continuity. Or the first paragraph should be one of those italicized taglines.  However, I'm already pleased with the set-up.  Not too flowery, enough to give a sense of the world we're going into.) 

Destined to wind up "wed or dead," (I have a feeling I'm going to like this lady's writing style.  Tehe.) Amani’s counting on her sharpshooting skills to get her out of Dustwalk. (Um, how? Is there some kind of contest?)  When she meets Jin, a mysterious and devastatingly handsome foreigner, (*cough*Love interest. Is he "just about her age?") in a shooting contest, (Should mention this above.) she figures he’s the perfect escape route.  (Because he's a foreigner? Do they all come with escape plans? I'm being snarky, but I really am intrigued by the plot. I'm all for female sharpshooting badasses.) But in all her years spent dreaming of leaving home, she never imagined she'd gallop away on a mythical horse, fleeing the murderous Sultan's army, with a fugitive who's wanted for treason. (Now you've locked me in. Armies! Fugitives! HORSIES. In one sentence, the stakes are laid out and amped up.) And she'd never have predicted she'd fall in love with him (The Sultan or the horse?  Kidding...but seriously.)...or that he'd help her unlock the powerful truth of who she really is. (Is she magical!? Why doesn't she know who she is?) 

the verdict 

4/5 stars
would i read it?:  yes 


I like that this one is short and punchy, except that it sometimes sacrifices clarity for succinctness.  There are a few orphaned pronouns running about, some excessive conjunctions, and a few ideas mashed together that would do well to spend time apart.  And if you're going to introduce "hero has big secret," you might want to allude to that in the first bit.  Plus, you know, typical young adult tropes and such, but I can't really blame it too much here.  (WAIT, IS JIN A DJINNI!?)  Hem.  Aside aside, I'm still intrigued by this book.  The unique phrasing (wed or dead, gunpowder girl) gives me high hopes for the writer's prose, and for the most part, the plot is outlined tightly, giving away just enough to entice without spoiling the punchline.  

Also mythological horses.  

*mic drop*  


your thoughts

Does this blurb grab you?  
Do you agree with my thoughts?  If not, how so?  
Have you read it?  Does the blurb match the pages? 
Do you have any recommendations for blurbs I should shred?  

 



2 comments:

  1. WELL I ALREADY LOVE THIS BOOK SO I'M COMPLETELY BIASED. XDXD I didn't even barely read the blurb before I knew I needed it, hehehe. I'm more like "oh did you say desert culture and djinn? NEEEED" and then I dash out for the book. I do love some of the phrasing there, though. FOR SURE. :D It's really catchy.

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    1. Hahaha you don't sound biased AT ALL what are you talking about?! xD I pretty much wanted it after desert culture and djinn too, but that would make a really short blog post so I read it over again. Tehe.

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